8th Graders share their 6-word poetry memoirs after completing a unit on poetic devices and poetry analysis.
Tuesday, November 9, 2010
Period 9 Poems
Post 3 of your poems as comments under your class period. Make sure to give yourself credit by, at the least, signing your poem with your first name or initials.
Liz, I really liked how these poems are very true to you. One suggestion I have is... nothing your poems are perfect!! I noticed you used the poetic device, poetic license.
To Ashley:.....*sad face* you make me feel sad. Very in-dept poems. Tugs heart strings in me. Then again, its mostly strong feelings that create poetry. Good job....ASH *giggle/snort*
To Randy:...... Nerdtastical. This hasen't really changed my opinion of you as the wordy smart kid. Good job Randy/ I Salute you for your interesting memoirs.
To Makayla: Sorry if i spelt your name wrong. I was to lazy to look.
Gone; But still in our hearts. ...ingenious. Perfect bittersweet line. i love it. it really was heart warming....in a way.... :D tell your mom i said hi.
Maddie, I really liked how you are my best friend. Just kidding, well you are my best friend but... your poems resemble you perfectly. One suggestion I have is to make them even more funny! I really enjoy reading funny poems and I feel like you would make the perfect funny poem. ~Brianna
105 comments:
1.When I fly.You ground me.
2.When Im alone.Your always there.
3.When I smile.Im really crying.
-Liz
1) You will never leave my heart.
2) I know you went to heaven.
3) Life was no good with you.
4) There's a reason, life goes on.
-BW
1. Watching him suffer, watching him die.
2. B-ball is my life, my dream.
3. I saw it happen four times.
-EM
1. Full of interesting
events and knowledge.
2. Food, video games,
sleep, school, family.
2. Happy with a hint
of wonder.
-Randy
1. You hear basketball, you play hard.
2. Family is a very precious thing.
3. I love to play sports everyday.
-Alexa
1. Saying goodbye was the hardest thing.
2. I am me, live with it.
3. One minute here, the next gone.
4. Gone; but still in our hearts.
-Makayla
1)I dont mind
They don't know.
2)They were none,
they were one.
3)The old is
fading slowely away.
-JEJT
Alexa,
I really like how you included basketball in yours. I love basketball.
Liz,
I really liked how you wrote your poems. They sound really good. I love them! Can't wait to hear more.
-Alexa
Poem#1
Having fun is not an option.
Poem#2
Life's a big bowl of hugs.
Poem#3
Love for my family is essential.
Poem#4
Cloud Nine is better than reality.
Maddie
1. I ski everyday in my mind!
2. I dont like football, its soccer.
3. Golf is great don't you hate!
D.S
1. The end of one, begins another.
2. Your personality tells who you are.
3. You gotta' risk to get it.
Will
1. What we have left are memories.
2. Growing to be who we are.
3. Live in the future, not past.
-Sara
1. I cannot belive you did this.
2. I'm not sure about anything anymore.
3. Why do you stare at me?
4. Under every superhero, there's a villian.
-Gabby
1.How could this happen to you.
2.I believe you were always good.
3.Life has taught me many things
-Cheyenne M
Erin,
One suggestion I have is to use more poetic devices, but I really like the basketball poem.
-Alexa
dear brooke,
those were really deep poems and i really liked themi thought they were quite amazing!!
1. I loved him, and he died.
2. I love, my heart gets broken.
3. People will die, life goes on.
4. I wish I could hold you.
5. Hearts break, life will go on.
-Ashley
1:
Your Mendatious. Go google it, Idiot.
2:
Yeah, I'm an Otaku. Lay off.
3:
Objective: Stare untill people are uncomfortble.
-NM
Randy,
love the video game thing, and the fam.
Dear Liz,
I like how you made your poem say one thing in the first three words and mean something else in the last three.
1. Hypothoridism is a diease take pill
2. Earth dying I try to help
3. Enviormental engineer I want to become
Shelby
Liz,
I really liked how you used two sentences to emphasize each poem.
-Brooke
1. Don't wanna be who you are.
2. I lie, I hurt; I'm sorry.
3. Mistakes make us who we are.
4. One thing I want, and have.
5. I'm a stranger to myself sometimes.
6. Smiles can lie, just like people.
7. I am me, not a stereotype.
-Kayla
Poem Number 1:
I swear I have blond roots.
Poem Number 2:
Count me out on ALL drugs.
Poem Number 3:
I can't live without my besties.
~Brianna
dear randy,
haha i think that is so you very good i really thought they were good!
Davis,
I really liked how your poems are about sports and they are the sports you love to play! Great idea.
-Alexa
will, love the risk thingy and that personality thing, even if its not always true
Maddie,
One suggestion I have for you is........try to use more poetic devices.
Dear Sara,
I liked how you stated in your third poem that you live in the future not the past. That can be a very important part of some poeples' lives.
liz,
I really like your poems, they were great!I like the fact that you made them deep and emotional!
- gabby
Ashley,
I really like how deep your poems are and how much meaning they have.
-Brooke
natalia.
that was interesting and, well, a little freaky. but all in all, pretty funny
Dear Liz,
I love how you're poems are so deep.
Dear Ashley,
I like how deep and exciting your poems are. And how there must be a lot of meaning behind it.
sara,
your poems were great! very true about life!
davis
Erin,
I really loved your poem.I noticed you used imagery.I just have one question what did you watch four times.
-Cheyenne
Randy,
I love your poems they are amazing, they are so you....:]
-Gabby
Natalia
Awesome poems! Histerical.
Ashley, I live how your poems are about love and life.
Dear Shelby,
I like how you put in your poem that you like to help the Earth and you want to help it.
Dear Sara,
I love your poems!! Love ya girl!!! Your poems are so true. Amazing1!! :)
dear maddie,
i love your poem i really likle your first one it is just so deep haha and exciting!
Natalia
I love your poems they're really different, the google it you idiot is funny, what does Mendatious mean lol.
Ashley
Maddie,
I really like how you said having fun is not an option I agree.
-Sara
Liz, I really liked how you wrote Poem#3, you used opposites like smile and cry.
Maddie
brooke,
your poems are good.
davis
Erin,
I love your poems!! They are sad but thats ok :) Amazing!! :)
Natalia, I love how you put "The amazing Natalia Lady said..." and I love how you said the first poem to me and I thought you were being serious.
rand,
i love your second poem. it shows the life of a teenager haha!
davis
Natalia you are very funny
what does Okatu means
OK I accept the mission stare stare stare
Joe
try to remember the ' in don't next time.
Maddie,
I noticed you used the poetic device called a metaphor. It was smooth and I really liked it.
Liz,
I really liked how these poems are very true to you. One suggestion I have is... nothing your poems are perfect!! I noticed you used the poetic device, poetic license.
~Brianna
Dear Natalia,
I loved how you can write poems on the spot.You are so funny and you show it in your writing.You have an amazing talent.
Makayla,
Love your poems. They are so full of emotion.
To Ashley:.....*sad face* you make me feel sad. Very in-dept poems. Tugs heart strings in me. Then again, its mostly strong feelings that create poetry. Good job....ASH *giggle/snort*
To Randy:...... Nerdtastical. This hasen't really changed my opinion of you as the wordy smart kid. Good job Randy/ I Salute you for your interesting memoirs.
To Makayla: Sorry if i spelt your name wrong. I was to lazy to look.
Gone; But still in our hearts.
...ingenious. Perfect bittersweet line. i love it. it really was heart warming....in a way....
:D tell your mom i said hi.
BW, I really like your third poem, beacuse I can relate to it.
Randy,
Your third poem is really good I like how your saying your happy but your wondering at the same time.
-Ashley
Randy happy with a hint of wonder very inspiering
Dear Randy,
I like how you show what goes on in your life. It helps describe you.Very nice job.
Natalia, I liked how you wrote objective and then wrote the rest of the poem.
Maddie
Randy
You've got nothing to work on. Keep the the funny going!
1. Scared to show my true feelings.
2. Smarter then people think i am.
3. I truley care about other people.
- Meghan
Gabby I like poem #4 because I can relate 2 the symbolism
Erin
1, Awesome job.
2, Is b-ball baseball or basket ball?
3, What was watched 4 times?
Will,
I really agree that you have to risk to get it because sometimes when you want something it's not always easy to get.
-Sara
Natalia,
I think I am amazed of how anazing your poems are, they are so you. I think i am goon cry, they were so good...please write more!:]
Natalia,
I love how funny and true your poems are!
By the way, you spelled my name right, and I will tell my mom you said hi. (:
Liz
I like your third poem because I can relate to it.
-Ashley
Brooke,
I like your peoms and how they explain a lot in your life.
Bri, I like how you expressed your opinion by capitalizing all.
Maddie
Randy thank you so much I consider myself a tree huger
Maddie,
I really liked how you are my best friend. Just kidding, well you are my best friend but... your poems resemble you perfectly. One suggestion I have is to make them even more funny! I really enjoy reading funny poems and I feel like you would make the perfect funny poem.
~Brianna
Erin #1 is very touching I feel 4 u
Ashley,
I really like your poems. They are really sad but, I think they are true things that could happen at anytime.
Makayla,
Your poems are very deep and meaningful. I love them!!
~Brianna
Randy,
I like how you told what you do in your life. It is good that you added your family in it!!
-Sara
Alexa I belive a good family is a precious thing
will, u now i hat grammr a' spellin
notice the spellin in this messag
Will,
B-ball means basketball. :-)
To will: Thanx, Buddy :D
to Bayla24:
.....I was being serious....*STARE*
to Shelby:
.....creeper...JUST KIDDING xD Thanks Shelby.
to Cheyenne: Says you. Your.....EPIC! (sorry liz)
to Maddie: I actually copied of that "colonize mars" thing on the video, but thanks anyway *happy face*
1. I believe that life is amazing.
2. I am a relativly positive person.
3. make good to change the world.
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Makayla, I loved the seccond poem.:)
Sophie<3
Liz, your poem were really cool and simple. Loved it!
Sophie
Sara, I loved your third poem. It is so true!
Sophie
1.Slow danceto a fast song.
2.Life's to short go crazy.
3.A roller coaster life gets bumpy
1. creativity, looking deep, hoping for best...
2. A fighter... A gamer... A kid.
3. wondering upon thoughts of my life.
1.always look ahead, never look behind.
2.life is like a sport, WIN!!!
3.sports, music, family, friends, love it
1.I'd rather be swimming than learning.
2.No one understands my older sisters.
3.Maude and I were born weird...
1. I live by my own rules.
2. I don't let others influence me.
3. I live up to my standards.
1. awkward is what im made of.
2. im not good your just bad.
3. fun is the best in life.
1.School is boring and it's dumb :]
2.Playing the computer like no tomorow.
3.Eating food like no never before. lol
1)Brooken promises is just like lies.
2)Endings are always new life beginings
3)forever we always will be together
Liz, I like your 2nd poem it reminds me of a great friend of mine
1.goth doesn't mean you hate everything.
2.some people like life, i dont.
3.learning is not really that bad.
1... Like to drive motor bikes around.
2... EA sports its in the game.
3... School makes me sick and nauseous.
Haha thats awsome erica
dakota! learn how to spell lol.
Erik!
1.trying hard to play very hard.
2.hard working means good accomplishments.
3. theres no pain then no game.
Liz, I like your 2rd poem. It reminds me of a good friend I have.
Natalia,
I love all your little poems haha they're funny (:
good job! :D
Love Cammie:p
randy, i like your second poem the most, because you just described your life...haha
1. i like the internet very much.
2. i cant not wear a hoodie.
3.i dont like my hair touched.
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